Talk:USS Hartford grounding

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Grammar

This article has major problems with the grammar and construction. I have no idea as to what the heck happened to the Hartford. Did it hit something? [[Paul, in Saudi 14:23, 14 May 2005 (UTC)]][reply]

Yeah, A shoal named Secca dei Monaci near the Island Isola delle Bisce in the Maddalena Archipelago. User:Surcouf 18:49, 14 May 2005 (CET)

Clearly this article was translated, probably from Italian or Corsican, by someone who speaks little or no English. You have to laugh at some of the language:

"Champions of seaweed"
"abnormous quantitatives"
"we have come to acquaintance of the content of the relationship"
"the crew comes reproached in order not to hold with sufficient emergency the route"
"the crew found a difference of four nodes in two arranges of survey of the speed"
"the captain orders a speed of 12 nodes"
"The navigator and the electronic technician leave know it it of control in order to go to verify the malfunctions, without to perceive the captain"

(I can't even figure out what that one means.)

"The navigator thought from the song its that order came from the footbridge"
"on the point to catch up free waters"

(Huh?)

"Registry of Tumors"

(And so on...)

DanMS 04:20, 3 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Slowly tidying up

I'm trying to clean up the language a bit - but I can't find the original Italian reference.

This appear to be the document the original Italian report was based on (thank yahoo search) http://crashrecovery.org/USS-Hartford.pdf

I'm probably not going to have the time to finish this, however.

Time passes

Okay I've done with my cleanup. I'm not sure about the timeline in the middle of the article. It's borrowing strongly from the PDF source. What do you think, should this be converted to prose ?

Secondly the environmental impact - I couldn't understand what the original section was talking about, so I found the only reference I could find and went with that. It does however say that there wasn't any impact. I'm sure someone is going to disagree with that.

Okay - edit away.

Megapixie 15:02, 1 September 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Source for the original wierd version of the article

I just found the source for the original version of the article (including the rather nice images of the Divers fixing the tail) - (Italian Language)

Megapixie 08:01, 22 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Merge

Why isn't this merged with USS Hartford? Seems kinda unnecessary to have a separate article. Paul 01:52, 26 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

I'm neutral on the matter. The more serious SanFrancisco grounding seems to be merged into USS San Francisco (SSN-711). The only problem might be reducing the article to 6 or 7 paragraphs. Megapixie 04:25, 26 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Dead link rescue, citation cleanup, inline citations

Did these things! Article should be in good shape now, though could use additional sources. —Trellbailey (talk) 09:16, 27 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]